Date: July 29th 1988
Dear Diary,
Today, I met a really strange man, who looked like an orang-utan, while he was crouched by my fire! I came into the forest and gathered some chunky, big logs, yet when I came back, the fire was gone.Who was it I thought? When I looked, I saw a skinny scruffy man: he was putting out my fire! 10 minutes later, he was shouting “Dameda, dameda!” What could those words mean? He had copper-brown skin because he was always out in the sun. Then I noticed the tanned, huge man’s arms surrounding my fire. Even though he was very diminutive, he bossed me around the island.
Michael
www: good year 5 adjectives – well done.
EBI: you just need to check commas,but good work.
www:I like that you have got a DE:DE in your writing.
EBI:I think that you could get another embedded clause in.
WWW – You included a hyphen and a de:de!